Comments:
- slow (see other post); but it seems to have gotten faster a bit. I think it's the plethora of images that is hurting the speed.
- font is a little bit too small, hard to read
- consider using different image skins in the background for each of the main pages. It's kind of boring seeing the same thing over and over again, but keep. Maybe those pictures of people (especially those technicians) with a bluish tint would work very nicely.
- Aren't you supposedly offering "everything" a company using a website needs? What about the designing of scripts? Consider adding that option on your website.
- As for revising your written work (changes in brackets):
home.html
With the recent change in the computer industry [specify what "change", it's almost necessary to have your own place on the internet. If you're serious about doing business, you [will] need a unique [and] professional website that will
attract your visitors, making them want to come back [shorten that entire segment into "keep the visitors coming back again and again"].
You don't want to have the same design as everyone else. You need to have a strong design that seperates your company from the rest. That's what we here at Protinium Designs are for [never end a sentence with a preposition]. We custom design your website the way you and your visitors want it.
Unlike most other web design companies that don't care for the customers, we do [do what? be more specific]. We stay in contact with our clients and create designs that appeal to all visitors.
Whatever you need, we will do [catchy, but inaccurate. Will you help me clean my room too?
]. Our guarantee is quality [very awkard wording] that cannot be found anywhere else. We look forward to doing business with you.
about.html
Protinium Designs is a leading IT web service
that offers a number of services to fulfill every company's Internet needs [too long]. Based in Philadelphia, Pennsylvania, USA [country is unnecessary], Protinium Designs is a part of Repro Global, an IT consulting and software
company which is a [get rid of this entire segment and have "...and software division of] division of RE/PRO Consultants, Inc.
Our staff is very experienced
with the Internet and web design [suggestion: change to "web designing and the Internet in general"]. Offering [wrong word] over five years of professional web design and expertise, Protinium Designs
has developed into [too weak, just use "is"] a strong leader in the computer industry.
The goal of Protinium Designs is to satisfy our clients. To do that, we believe in quality. All of our work is done originally [hmm...work is done originally by hand? awkward structure] and creatively by hand and can easily compete
with other companies that promise the same services [too weak, just use "the leading web designing firms on the Internet].
Our company has a strong hold [confusing, reword] and is managed by our experienced staff with [try the word "using"] state-of-the-art hardware that guarantees quality work. You cannot go wrong with Protinium Designs.
Other problems:
- registration, spelled wrong on "Services" page
- maintenance, spelled wrong multiple times including in an image
- "estimate price quote" sounds awkward (Services page)
- umm...on the META page, "priced at an incredibly good price" sounds awkard
- "at lighting fast speeds"? Do you mean "at
lightning fast speeds"? (search engine)
- "efficiency" spelled incorrectly on "Search Engine" page
I don't want to go on here, but I think you get the point.
Content: A (94)
Layout: A+ (99)
Colors/Images/Formatting: A+ (98)
Technical: A- (90)
Overall (not an average): 95% (A NEW RECORD!)
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